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EXT. ELEMENTARY SCHOOL COURTYARD-MIDDAY
Focus in on a PURPLE flower (Amaranth) and see a child's hand pick the flower. Shift to a 4th-grade girl with blonde hair pulled into two pigtails walking towards a group of girls when she nearly trips and realizes her shoe is untied. She is wearing a white polo and RED skirt, and her hair ties are RED as well. As she reaches down to tie it, the PURPLE flower is placed right in front of her face as CAM says:
CAM
(timidly)
Flora?
Shift to CAM, a very boyish young girl with short, black hair pulled into a ponytail. Note that she is very androgynous, and could be either a boy or a girl. She has on a white polo and BLUE long-sleeve shirt underneath, and a soft smile on her face.
CAM (cont'd)
I'm, uh, the new girl. You know, the one who sits across from you? Well, anyways... I just wanted to give you this flower. It's dumb, I know.
FLORA reaches up to receive the flower.
FLORA
Because my name is Flora?
CAM
No. Because it's pretty, like you.
FLORA and CAM freeze in place, as FLORA is clearly surprised by the openness of CAM'S words. FLORA begins to blush. The group of girls that FLORA was walking to realize she is not there and one girl with dark brown hair and freckles becomes angry.
NICOLE
(shouting)
Flora! Get over here!
FLORA becomes flustered and takes the flower in her hand. She stands up and sniffs the flower, her eyebrows furrowed but a tight smile on her face showing the contrast of her emotions.
FLORA
Thank you. That's very sweet. What did you say your name was again?
CAM
(blushing, pleased with Flora's reaction)
Uh, it's Cameron. But you can call me Cam, if you'd like.
FLORA
Cam. Well, I guess I'll see you in class, Cam.
FLORA runs over to the group of girls and CAM watches after her, then crouches down and starts playing with a caterpillar. FLORA joins the group of girls where the girls are admiring NICOLE'S new phone.
GIRL #1
So your dad gave it to you for no reason at all? Just like that?
NICOLE
(nodding)
Just like that! Daddy just said, "A girl like you deserves the latest ePhone!" And he bought it!
The other girls burst into praise and admiration, while FLORA looks down at her flower lovingly and begins to sniff it. NICOLE notices, frowns angrily, and then smiles wickedly.
NICOLE
Hey, Flora. Where'd you get that flower?
FLORA'S eyes snap open, then she purses her lips and looks away.
FLORA
Flower? Oh, you mean this flower? (shrugs) The new girl just gave it to me.
NICOLE looks over at CAM, squints her eyes and sneers.
NICOLE
(mockingly)
The new girl? You mean the one that looks like a boy?
The group of girls laugh, only encouraging NICOLE more and causing FLORA to turn a deep red and cringe a little.
NICOLE (CONT'D)
Why'd she give you a flower, anyways? Is she a lesbian?
NICOLE enunciates every syllable with a sneer on her face. FLORA squirms, clearly uncomfortable.
FLORA
Wh-What's that?
NICOLE
It's a girl... who like-likes other girls.
A chorus of EWs ensue from the other girls and Flora clutches onto the flower, looking away.
FLORA
E-Ew! That's so gross!
NICOLE
Yeah, mommy and daddy say that girls like that are a disgrace. (Pause) I bet she like-likes you... Flora, you're not a lesbian, are you?
FLORA
What?! No! Of course not! That's so gross!
NICOLE smiles and saunters closer to FLORA, who draws back.
NICOLE
Really? Then prove it. Give the flower back to her.
FLORA clutches the flower unsurely. NICOLE snickers, then starts taunting FLORA by singing, "CAM and FLORA sitting in a tree," and the other girls join in. FLORA wrings the flower and cringes visibly until she finally turns around and marches to CAM angrily. CAM is playing with a caterpillar on her hand, and turns around when she hears FLORA stomping towards her. She has a serene smile on her face, but when she sees the dark expression on FLORA'S face her own smile falls. FLORA'S lip quivers, and she finally starts ripping off the petals of the flower one by one.
FLORA
(as she rips the petals)
Here's... what I think... about your stupid... flower!
FLORA throws the stem of the flower in CAM'S face, who flinches only slightly and looks up at FLORA with a stoic expression on her face. She doesn't move the petals from her lap, and the two girls stare at each other for a long moment. FLORA turns around and walks back to the group of girls, who are laughing and cheering her on.
END SCENE 1
This is a story I'm writing about two girls who fall in love.
I got the first scene done! :dummy: Although I'm not entirely sure how to write a screenplay and this is my first time EVERRR! ^^;
Criticism is welcome, and if anyone knows how to write screenplays please tell me if I did something wrong! Also, the format is different on my Word document, and the indents are correct there. It's just off on DA. :/
The purpose of this first scene is also to point out that gender conformity and bullying starts in elementary school, or even before. I do NOT condone any of the actions that Flora or the other girls did, in case that wasn't obvious. I'm merely pointing out that homophobia starts at a young age and is learned from older people. We need to be more accepting and teach kids at a young age that it's okay to be gay~ :huggle:
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Cedarhart Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2012  Student General Artist
If I'm remembering correctly, you can just write a journal entry, and post it as a deviation. Not positive, but I can check for you. You could indent it properly that way. Talk to you soon! :relax:
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darkwings16 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student General Artist
hehe, looks good:D
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Telkiss Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you!! :glomp:
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darkwings16 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Youre welcome!:D
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Cedarhart Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Well, if THIS is your first try, you did a BANG-UP JOB! :D

It's is pretty wizard!
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Telkiss Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my!!! Thank you!! :blush:

I mean, I had a lot of help from websites and had a layout to work with so... :giggle:
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Cedarhart Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student General Artist
No matter! It is fantastic!
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BloodOnTheVeil Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow, this is so good :) I can't wait for more
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Telkiss Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks so much! I just put the second scene up yesterday. :)
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BloodOnTheVeil Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome ^^ Yeah I saw it :)
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